DING REPORT SAMPLEThe below is the text of ding report for a Wharton application, which includes a headnote,and then running commentaries and endnotes to each question. This is sent to you after a review of the application you send us. Then you get a chance to ask questions about our notes by email, and then we can talk by phone to go over remaining questions and advice for next year. HEADNOTE:
ESSAY ONE:
?????AHEM, ABRUPT AND OFFPUTTING INTRO OF THIS IDEA. AS A SUMMARY OF PRE-GRAD SCHOOL WORK HISTORY, ABOVE IS MIDLY UNCLEAR ON BIG ISSUES OF INFLUENCES, AND ANNOYING UNCLEAR ABOUT DATES, NAMES ETC. WHICH I SPPZE WE COULD LIVE W. BUT ANNOYING. HUH????????? THIS IS LIKE A NEAR MISS, IT IS CLICHED, SORTA IMPERSONAL, NOT GROWING ENUF OUT OF STUFF WE HAVE HEARD ABOUT YOU IN ANY DETAIL, AND A LITTLE ROBOTIC. ESSAY ONE --ENDNOTES CLOSE, AND PARTS OK, BUT SEVERAL WEAKNESSES--CLICHES, LACK OF SPECIFITY, LACK OF PASSIONATE AND DETAILED EXAMPLES, SOME JUMPY TRANSITIONS, VAUGE GOALS ETC. SINK THIS ALTHO PARTS ARE OK. WHAT HAPPENS, AS NOTES HOPEFULLY MAKE CLEAR, IS THAT ONCE READER BEGINS TO GET ANNOYED, EVEN STUFF THAT IS SO-SO, E.G. WHY WHARTON, BEGINS TO FESTER, SO AFTER A SPRIGHTLY START, THIS KEEPS GETTING WORSE, AND FINALLY ANNOYING, AND YOU WILL BE TAGGED, IN FEEDBACK W. UNCLEAR GOALS, LACK OF WHY NOW, NO SENSE OF WHAT W. CAN REALLY DO FOR YOU, UNCLEAR INFLUENCES, ESP. HOW TECH AND FINANCE PARTS OF YOUR LIFE FIT IN, ETC. ALL OF WHICH IS TRUE. ALSO YOU OMIT KEY PERSONAL GROWTH MANTRAS --WORK LIFE BALANCE, ETHICS, MENTORS, ALL STUFF THEY LIKE TO HEAR ABOUT . NOT FATAL, BUT IT ALL ADDS UP. :: ESSAY TWOEssay Question 2: Describe when you were a part of a team where the group process and/or intended outcome failed. What was your role, how did you contribute to the process or outcome, and what did you learn? (500 words) ESSAY TWO ENDNOTES: DUNNO MAN, POSSIBLY GOOD SITUATION, BUT YOU DIFFICULITES BECOME SIT COM LIKE AND WE SEE NO REAL EFFORTS ON YOUR PART TO ANALYSZE, PARTICULARIZE, OR CAPTURE WHAT WAS REALLY GOING ON, WHO WAS INVOLVED BEYOND CLICHE TYPES OF OBSESSIVE PERSON, REGULAR GUY, ETC. NO SENSE OF DIFFEREENT COMMUNICATION STYLES, DIFFERENT CULTURAL BACKGRONDS RESULTING IN TEAM DYSFUNCTION, SURE THERE IS PLENTY OF DYSFUNCTION BUT IT IS ALL CLICHE. SECOND HALF OF THIS IS TOTAL BS, AND UNRELATED TO ANY PARTICULARS YOU CAPTURE ABOUT GROUP MEMBERS AND THIS REAL SITUATION. :: ESSAY THREEEssay Question 3: Describe an impact you’ve had on an individual, group or organization. What did you do? How has this experience been valuable to you or others? (500 words) HUH, CONTEXT IS UNCLEAR,AND IDEA THAT YOU WOULD BE GIVEN SUCH A MAJOR LEADERSHIP ROLE ,E.G. TO FORM YOUR OWN TEAM, ON A HI-PROFILE AND EXPERIMENTAL PROJECT, WELL, IT STRAINS CRUDILITY, THIS HAS EXAGGERATION AND BULLSHIT WRITTEN ALL OVER IT. WHO WERE THESE MEMEBERS, THE PHD'S??? OR THE NEW TEAM OF YOUR PEERS???? IT IS JUST CONFUSING. ET.C ESSAY THREE--ENDNOTES SITUATION, METRICS OF THE GROUP, GROUP DYNAMICS, ETC. ARE ALL OPAQUE AND ANNOYING AS DISCUSSED, TOO MUCH A VICTORY LAP ( AND BARELY CREDIBLE AS STATED) AND NOT ENUF AN ANALYSIS OF HOW YOU WERE EFFECTIVE IN MEETING OBSTACLES 1 2 3 4 AND WHAT YOU LEARNED FROM EXERCISNG THOSE STYLES OF LEADERSHIP AND TEAMWORK. :: ESSAY FOUREssay Question 4: Describe a situation where your values, ethics or morals were challenged. How did you handle the situation? (500 words) :: ESSAY FIVEEssay Question 5: Please identify and explain what you would consider the weakest area of your application. (250 words) HUH, THAT IS WHAT THE FIRST ESSAY IS FOR, AND NOT A BIG DEAL, QUITE FRANKLY. :: ESSAY SIXEssay Question 6: Please tell us something else about yourself that you feel will help the Admissions Committee know you better. (250 words)
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